Rough cut 3 documentary

Changes from second rough cut to final documentary

I made a few final changes from my second rough cut to my final documentary. These last few changes were adding voice overs to my previous documentary in order to make it flow better and make better sense to the audience so they know where I am going and to have better sense of what is coming up next. I also decided to do this because when doing my research I learnt that most documentaries have a lot of voice overs so I wanted to add more.

Rough cut 2

)

This my second rough cut. I have changed a lot since my first rough cut and thought a lot more about the conventions of a documentary and tried to follow them a lot more.

General audience feedback from second rough cut

I have collected feedback for my second rough cut of my documentary.

The main things people think went well are:

•  My framing of the shots.
• My variety of shots such as having close up, mid shots and wide shot.
• My shooting material being appropriate to my documentary.
• Mise-en-scene including my lighting and the setting being an office for the psychologist and a bedroom for the casual conservation with the girl.
• Editing so it is clear to the viewer what my documentary is about and what my documentary is featuring.

What I could improve:

• I could hold the camera more steadily at certain parts of the documentary.
• Use better sound with certain parts of my documentary.

What I am going to change:

• If I had more time to film I would re film the parts where the camera is slightly shaky, However because I do not have time I am going to edit and change the sound by adding more voiceovers to my documentary as that whats some people said would make it better in my feedback. 

Twitter feedback for rough cut

I put my rough cut of my documentary on to twitter and asked from feedback from people. Three people replied and gave me this feedback.

Changes to script

When I originally filmed my Doctor she followed the script I set out perfectly. However when I started editing I realised from the feedback I received that to have her saying all of that in one time was to much. I therefore cut a lot out from what my Doctor said out but still did use part of what she said in the script for my documentary.

Changes from my first rough cut to my second rough cut

In my first rough cut I put everything I had filmed together without really thinking much about how I wanted it to be. When I had more time I went back and cut a lot out from the doctor and the two girls speaking. I also added in pictures, more people giving their opinions, titles and some voice overs. When doing this I refereed back to my planning I had done at the beginning and watched more documentaries so I could remember how I wanted my documentary to be. I feel like I made massive improvements from my first rough cut to my second.